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Post by Charisma69 on Aug 24, 2004 18:14:40 GMT -5
Sounds great Bango, I can't wait to read it. 
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Post by Charisma69 on Aug 24, 2004 19:45:09 GMT -5
It's pretty good so far Bango, I can't wait to read the rest.
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Post by tjaman on Aug 24, 2004 20:23:28 GMT -5
Well ... some of the dialogue seems out of character, but you're Bango, after all, not the Jossians. I'm reading it as a story that has characters I've never met but with very familiar names. Keep going. P.S. -- I know why Willow doesn't want him for herself ... ;D |
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Post by tjaman on Aug 26, 2004 7:34:12 GMT -5
Not bad, but could've been way more explicit in terms of what he was doing and what happened that upset her so much (and a window on how they got to this point in their story). Maybe a flashback in Chapter 3, her reactions?
Keep it up tho -- it's an intersting read and all of this is meant to be constructive.
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Post by tjaman on Aug 26, 2004 9:13:36 GMT -5
there will be some twists, shocks, and even some explicit scenes Heavens! On this board? Day ending in "y," is it, luv?  |
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Post by tjaman on Aug 30, 2004 10:31:23 GMT -5
Well, it is better, but I don't know what kind of warmth Buffy will feel in Angel's lips, per se. Unless he's just fed -- or just come out of a sauna -- he's room temperature. |
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Post by tjaman on Aug 30, 2004 17:39:17 GMT -5
OK, I get Buffy in a thrall to Angel -- Buffy falls in thralls; she's a thrall-faller -- but Angel as a human? He's Liam, then, and more than 250 years old! LOL. Obviously that doesn't seem like a lot at your advanced age, but still ... Ah, run with it. With no prospect of a S6 I take what I can get. |
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Post by angelusfan3 on Aug 30, 2004 17:56:07 GMT -5
ok i just now read the and its ok in the first part it was good but the second part seemed a little blah i hope the rest is better
but its a good fanfic story
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Post by angelusfan3 on Aug 30, 2004 18:26:26 GMT -5
that might help ;D
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Post by Charisma69 on Aug 30, 2004 19:00:33 GMT -5
I really enjoyed the first version of Chapter One, but you've really made it better.
I totally get that these are different characters - only with the same names.
I'm guessing the story is going with one of your vids? That would explain the choices of scenes. You know, making a new story to go with the footage.
Cool idea. 
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Post by tjaman on Aug 31, 2004 11:47:22 GMT -5
That is a great idea. I totally missed that. That absolutely rox, Bango. Keep it up! |
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Post by grailwolf on Nov 24, 2004 6:22:33 GMT -5
Bango, I've been meaning to say for a while that I downloaded the videos on your site (including Deadly Desires) and I was very impressed! You have a very good feel for visual storytelling. What software did you use for these? I ask because I've always wanted to try my hand at one (not that I'll actually do it, but yet another project to tinker with would be fun).
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Post by tjaman on Nov 30, 2004 12:15:23 GMT -5
You were looking for the word "retreat" instead of "retrieve," I think, but it's still pretty cool.
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