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Post by PyleansDontLeaveMe on Dec 15, 2004 13:06:29 GMT -5
This thread is for feedback and discussion of work distributed amongst the Algonquin Round Table between December 8th, 2004 and December 14th, 2004
The pieces in question are :
TJ's Viper in my Busom- Act IV
Tealbox's lovely Short Short story
If you would like to be added to the roles of the illustrious Algonquin Round Table in order to be able to submit and receive Round Table works in progress, please contact Py, who will probably just add your name to the roster without any bruhaha whatsoever.
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Post by tjaman on Dec 15, 2004 13:23:55 GMT -5
I liked Teal's piece. I don't remember much about it anymore (he wrote, bitchily), but it seemed very stream-of-consciousness, lucid and readable. 
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Post by PyleansDontLeaveMe on Dec 15, 2004 13:31:38 GMT -5
Mea culpa. Mea indeed culpa. Sorry for the delay in getting this setup. I am a bad man |
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Post by PyleansDontLeaveMe on Dec 15, 2004 13:48:44 GMT -5
Firsties- A bit o' grammatical to-do Good Shoes Day by Ben Holladay He sat in bio, with nothing to do. The people around him sat trying to read their palms. He didn’t believe in that stuff, not that he didn’t believe a higher (power/being) governed and bound all in the universe, he just didn’t (ac)cept it was manifested in such things. Lines on a hand are just lines on a hand; picking up a penny rarely changes the world much from had you not grabbed it. The big picture was simply bigger. He was abruptly shaken back from his thoughts. The girl across from him had made a loud squealing noise as the girl to his right had snatched her book away. Thinking the event over in his head he realized how ambiguous such a sentence is. Most things are like that. Pointless and hard to decipher. OK- The boring stuff out of the way. The actual name for this style of writing is Epigram. Mark Twain was fairly well know for doing them. I love how willing you are to experiment in different writing styles when the most of us have one or perhaps two that we stick to. Speaks well of you TJ's right, this has a great flow, and the last line really does tie the whole thing together nicely. I can only repeat my chapbook suggestion from discussing your Haiku's- you really should be making some green off of this sort of thing |
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Post by TealBox on Dec 18, 2004 12:03:17 GMT -5
I love compliments. You guys keep telling me I'm a good writer, but I still find it hard to believe. Like in yearbook, I had to write a short piece of Suessical, our fall musical this year. My yearbook teacher will gripe you out over the tiniest things down to having a picture an eighth of a pica too far to the left. She accepted my story for publication exactly as it was in my rough draft except she had me change the word "producers" to "directors."
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Post by bitterman on Dec 18, 2004 12:11:10 GMT -5
You suck, Teal.
Just keeping it real, yo.
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