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Post by Charisma69 on Aug 28, 2004 13:13:21 GMT -5
I think it's good stuff Feigy. It's not too depressing at all. Has a nice broody vibe to it.
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Post by tjaman on Sept 1, 2004 17:33:16 GMT -5
Sorry I haven't gotten to mention this before now, but that really was a cool set of verse. I can hear Kim Ritchie completely above acoustic guitar. Interesting worldviews reflected in sparse, meaning-filled lines. Keep it up!
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Post by Dr. Purple Goddess on Sept 5, 2004 12:15:10 GMT -5
you knew I was waiting to hear your opnion and so you just had to make me suffer didn't ya? I don't know if it's a good thing to always here what you were looking for, but the comments everyone has made about this, were along the lines of what I had in mind for them. I'm just not sure how to expand on it...if I should at all. But it seems to be missing some things.
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Post by Dr. Purple Goddess on Sept 12, 2004 13:36:24 GMT -5
Fred & Me
Your curiosity soured the milk before it killed the cat, your love too late but never too little....
your soul was not extinguished... It burns within me still..... I am hollow from it too
the thrust of a dagger entering unfelt into me the instant knowing I wouldn't feel a thing
her lies gave me my destination allowed me to just feel, one last time.
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Post by Charisma69 on Sept 12, 2004 15:08:38 GMT -5
That was really good Feigy. Very excellent.
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Post by tjaman on Sept 13, 2004 11:27:48 GMT -5
I liked the first one better. This one seems to be metaphor salad -- sort of image overload. I have no idea what's going on, but that doesn't mean it's not good.
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Post by tjaman on Sept 13, 2004 11:31:25 GMT -5
*smacks forehead * Dammit -- that whole thing is in Wesley's voice, isn't it? [apologies] I sometimes very dumb. [/apologies]You just got an A, Feigy.
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Post by Dr. Purple Goddess on Sept 13, 2004 17:13:16 GMT -5
*smacks forehead * Dammit -- that whole thing is in Wesley's voice, isn't it? [apologies] I sometimes very dumb. [/apologies]You just got an A, Feigy. Not a problem tj... I am very glad you figured it out though. It's too bad it can't stand alone without the knowledge of Angel, but that's okay. And thanks for the first post though, because it assures me you are sharing an honest reaction. That's what I'm looking for. To be honest, I belted it out in like 2 minutes and was surprised at how easy it was for me to access Wes' feelings about Fred. I think I'm gunna do one for all the characters if I can.
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Post by rainbocarnage on Sept 20, 2004 23:40:24 GMT -5
Hello everyone! So, I'm back at college now which means high speed internet (or ethernet actually but who knows what the difference is...) 24/7 YAY! I hope to be around a lot more than I have been over the summer. Cause I miss you all, and I hope you've missed me too. Anywho, since is the creative writing section and I'm a writer (although maybe not creative) I wanted to post a link to my website where you can find some of my writing (the better stuff.) There are original short stories as well as fanfics and nonfic essays. I would post everything directly here but it's just way too much and I think you would kill me if I did. Having said that, please please please go to my site and read something--anything--and tell me what you think. I will go through this entire thread and read/feedback on what has already been posted. I'm really looking forward to delving into all of your creative minds. It will take me a while to get through these 11 pages of posts I'm sure, so in the meantime, I again beg you to visit my site. Thanks a lot! RainboCarnage www.hometown.aol.com/cowgurl32684/index.html
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Post by bitterman on Sept 20, 2004 23:41:51 GMT -5
Non-Creative Writer? There's always the WB! ;D
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Post by rainbocarnage on Sept 20, 2004 23:46:43 GMT -5
Yeah, I plan to work for them after I graduate from college. If they are looking for some dull and extremely unhuman characters with cardboard personalities, robotic dialogue, and the emotional maturity of a blueberry scone, then I'm the writer for them.
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Post by rainbocarnage on Sept 20, 2004 23:48:52 GMT -5
Oh and Feigy, I like your poem. I knew it was in Wes's voice from the first time so maybe I'm ahead of the curve here. I think the first line is pretty good. I've never heard that figure of speech before (the sour milk part) did you make it up? Cause it's good.
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Post by Dr. Purple Goddess on Sept 22, 2004 9:33:04 GMT -5
in a way, I suppose I did make up the sour milk part... but it was inspired by the way Illyria's essence took over Fred. The gruelling pain in which she was taken because of her curiosity, was definately the inspiration for that line, and the whole Poem for that matter. Oh and I don't think tj saw the title when he read it...I think I added that later. Anyway, thanks for the imput....hopefully I will be getting around to checking out your site soon.
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Post by Bango on Sept 22, 2004 15:14:06 GMT -5
That was a good poem Feigy. I wrote one about Buffy last year for a project I was doing. If anyone doesn't mine I might rewrite it here...later.
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Post by Dr. Purple Goddess on Sept 22, 2004 16:34:33 GMT -5
go for it. that's what this place is for. And thanks for the compliment.
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